Planning: Ancillary Drafts - Posters

Planning: Draft Animatic Movie Trailer

Planning: Draft Script

VOICE OVER

(on screen text)

In a small town, in the heart of England, two men were about to embark on a life changing experience.

Scene 1

BATHROOM - DAY

JOHN is a typical nerd. He dresses smartly, he's well spoken and he's always got his head buried in a book.

LUCAS is a typical cool kid. Dresses in the latest clothes, talks with confidence and swag and he's never really paying attenion.

JOHN is sat on the toilet, there's a very loud farting sound and he sighs with relief.

JOHN

You might wanna leave it a while mate. I think my digestive system's a bit off at the moment. My bad.

Lucas

Whatever mate.

JOHN then flushes and walks into his room, as he leaves LUCAS wanders out of him room and walks in the bathroom. 

LUCAS

That sinks, you're a pig. I'd never do that to you! What the hell!

JOHN 

(In the distance)

I'm ever so sorry. 

Scene 2

KITCHEN - DAY 

JOHN is making a sandwich, LUCAS comes in and gets a drink from the fridge. 

JOHN

Alright mate, what you doing today? 

LUCAS

Got my job interview, aint I? I'm buzzing!

JOHN 

I've got an interview today too, I'm a little nervous to be honest with you!

LUCAS

No way! Good luck buddy!

JOHN

Cheers, you too! Text me later to let me know!

Scene 3
PRINCIPALS OFFICE - DAY

PRINCIPAL, sat at his desk looking over the applications in front of him. He's late twenties, dressed smartly in his suit. Sat behind a big desk with lots of papers and a picture of his family.

LUCAS and JOHN, sat opposite him shifting slightly, looking very nervous. LUCAS and JOHN are in their early twenties's, JOHN is dressed in a shirt and tie, looking smart for his job interview, whereas LUCAS is dressed in a casual tracksuit, with a more laid back attitude to the interview.

PRINCIPAL

Thank you for your application. I now need you to go and report to the Head of Sport for your trial match.

LUCAS and JOHN

Okay, thank you!

Scene 4
LUCAS is sat waiting in the changing room to see who he's up against for the PE job.

JOHN then comes through the door and they notice each other straight away.

LUCAS

No way, what are you doing here? Please tell me we're not both going for this job?

JOHN

Well it appears that way doesnt it. Can't believe you didn't tell me where you applied too!

LUCAS

You didn't tell me either man, jeez!

JOHN

Well true, but 'ey let the best man win!

JOHN then winks and grins at LUCAS. LUCAS returns the smile and they go out to meet their teams.

Scene 5
CHANGING ROOM - DAY

HEAD OF SPORT, approaches LUCAS and JOHN after the game to congratulate them. HEAD OF SPORT, is dressed casually in a tracksuit, he's in his thirties and relatively laid back.

HEAD OF SPORT

Congratulations, you were both very impressive candidates and we have decided to take you both on. You’ll both oversee the improvement and development of the teams.

JOHN

 Thank you! We won’t let you down.

LUCAS

 Yeah! We’ll be league champions, I promise!

HEAD OF SPORT

(Chuckles)

 I’ll hold you to that!

HEAD OF SPORT, then leaves and JOHN and LUCAS hug each other.

VOICE OVER

 (on screen text)

Now their dreams had become a reality! They were living the high life.

Scene 6
THEIR OFFICE - DAY

LUCAS. sat at desk watching Youtube, the video 'Gangnam Style' is playing. LUCAS attempts to dance to the video, and fails.

LUCAS

Yeah Gangnam style!

LUCAS, then proceeds to crumple a piece of paper and throw it in the bin.
JOHN, then opens the door, walks in and sees the paper in the bin

JOHN

 Really? Do you not have anything better to do with your time?

LUCAS

 I’m the match manager. We only have one match left, you’re in charge of training and all that other crap!

JOHN

(sighs)

 True, I’ll just get on with it then shall I, Jose.

LUCAS

(smirking)

Yes, yes you should.

JOHN, sits at his desk and begins typing up lesson plans on his laptop

LUCAS

So what do I do?

JOHN

Amuse yourself, shouldn’t be hard

JOHN, then attempts the Gangnam Style dance, which they both laugh at.

LUCAS, then reaches into his desk and pulls out a BB gun.

LUCAS
(Grinning)
Look what i've got mate!

JOHN
Why have you got that?!

LUCAS, then raises the gun and aims at JOHN.

JOHN

What the hell Lucas!! 

LUCAS
Don't worry, it won't hurt.

JOHN
WHAT?!

LUCAS then fires the gun at JOHN and it hits him in the chest.

PRINCIPAL and HEAD OF SPORT, enter to see and find LUCAS holding the gun and JOHN clutching his chest and the office covered in screw up bits of paper.

Scene 7

FLAT - NIGHT

JOHN, is sat on the sofa back at the flat drinking some cider.

JOHN

Ah Stella Artois Cidre, not Cider, Cidre.

Sound of the front door opening and closing

JOHN

Lucas, is that you?

LUCAS, opens the door and shuffles in. He then sits down next to John and opens a can of Fosters.

LUCAS

Yeah, turns out Principle didn’t find shooting you with the BB gun as funny as I did and he sacked me.

JOHN

Oh no! That's not good!

LUCAS
I know

JOHN

So what’s the plan now?

LUCAS

Well I’ll just have to search around for more coaching jobs? Maybe take over a Sunday league team, preferably female team.

LUCAS, winks and starts smiling stupidly.

JOHN

You disgust me.

LUCAS, laughs again

Scene 8
CORRIDOR - DAY

JOHN and HEAD OF SPORT, are chatting about the game at the weekend.

JOHN

Yeah I’m really sorry to let you down but my nan’s been arrested again for shooting my father. I have to go down with the family so i'm not going to be able to manage the match.

Scene 9

PRINCIPALS OFFICE - DAY

HEAD OF SPORT and PRINCIPAL, are talking about who they're going to get to manage the final league game of the season.

PRINCIPAL

So who are can we get to replace John?

HEAD OF SPORT

Well, Lucas is familiar with the team, tactics and he has got us to the top of the table?

PRINCIPAL

Fine, bring him in.

Scene 10
HEAD OF SPORTS OFFICE - DAY

LUCAS and HEAD OF SPORT, are sat talking about LUCAS managing the game. 

LUCAS

What’s this about?

HEAD OF SPORT

Well, seeing as John has left us for a family crisis. We would like you to come back and coach the team for the last game of the season? Lucas, coach the team, win the game and you may save your job.

LUCAS

Done!

Scene 11
CHANGING ROOMS -DAY

LUCAS, is stood in his clean suit, he's looking in the mirror and smiling to himself.

LUCAS

Come on, I can do this!

Scene 12
PITCH - DAY

The two captains are shaking hands and the ref is telling them to play fair.

VOICE OVER

The captains shake hands, the football is placed and the game begins.

Scene 13
BATHROOM - DAY

LUCAS is sat on the toilet, there's then a large farting sound. LUCAS then sighs once the sound has stopped. 

Planning: Shot List

Shot list from OliSearle

Planning: Storyboard

Storyboard and shotlist from Will Mandley

Planning: Production Outline

Planning: Production Concept

Research: Pitch Focus Group

Research: Audience Feedback

We showed our trailer to some of our target audience and gathered their responses, from this we were able to improve and develop our trailer to a higher standard.

• The narrative is unclear and sometimes confusing. The trailer is uncoventional for a comedy film, it includes funny scenes however the narrative style is poor and lacks a real storyline. However the editing is is good, and the use of cutting helps the trailer to flow.

• The storyline is badly thought out, it lacks real imagination. There is no real climax and the characters have nothing to work towards throughout the trailer. This trailer does not explain enough about the film and would not persuade me to go and watch it.

• I enjoyed the cutting between the scenes, it was very conventional for a comedy film. A few of the scenes included alot of comedy for example the 'Gangnam Style' scene. However the storyline could have been better as the narrative was very unclear.

• The trailer was well constructed however could have included more conventional ideas. The narrative and storyline isn't clear. The various settings and costumes used however are good as it gives it a sense of reality.

• Some of the scenes included were funny however the weren't really relevent and confused the storyline. Also the repeated bathroom scenes, although added comedy, didn't really fit in and had no real purpose within the narrative.

We have taken all this feedback on board and we're going to produce a new, clearer narrative and storyline to help make our trailer more conventional.